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Dinner for you: Page 3

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I'm doing this for my studies! More pages will follow <:

It's the first time for me doing a doujinshi!
Criticism is desired! xD

Reading is from right to left!

Done with Manga Studio EX 4.0

Cover & Page 1:

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MarikBentusi's avatar
Dat glass detail
dat curly hair
niiiiiice

Also I think the amount of grayscale layers on this page hit the sweet spot, not too few and not too many. Tho maybe leaving some backgrounds white helped. Actually you may consider giving the last panel a "happy" sun-rays-like background like here or here. There's a variety of these things, and I'm sure somewhere there's a list of which background fits which mood best, and they easily make the background less bland without requiring you to actually draw some complex stuff and clutter up the artstyle. Genius!

Also I noticed every single line of dialogue is followed up by an exclamation mark here and that some of them feel so snobby they demand a new line all for themselves.
Might want to teach them a lesson =P

But otherwise yeah, I like this page a lot :D